Reflection to Draft #1 of Informative Report

Esmeralda Santa

English 21003, Section M

Professor Matyakubova

13 September 2017

Reflection on First Draft

                                                                         My reflection

          Writing the informative essay for me was challenging because I didn't know how to organize 

my body paragraphs. I knew what I wanted to write about, but when it came to putting each 

paragraph in its place I got confused. Besides this, I also faced an issue with including the peer-

reviewed articles into my journal. There were a lot of Journals to choose from, but when I was able 

to narrow it down, I couldn’t pick a specific part of the article to include. These two challenges gave 

me a hard time to do well on the first draft. Some things I believed I did good was the structure of 

my body paragraphs. In order to write my body paragraphs I first included a topic sentence, 

summarized the journal I was reading, gave the evidence, analyzed the evidence, and than gave  a 

concluding sentence. I also believe that I did a decent job on keeping an objective stance throughout 

my report. Although I did this I was still able to include ethos, logos, and pathos to make my report 

stronger.

              

          My first draft still needs a lot of improvement. There are many things I would like to change or 

add to make it more cohesive. For example, I believe that I focused too much the biology part of 

Down syndrome and not enough on the effects it has on the child. I would like to add a paragraph 

that discuss how Down syndrome affects kids behavior, family style, and give more examples. Also I 

believe that I repeated certain information too much. There were times through the report that I 

repeated the definition of Down syndrome because I didn't know how else to word the fact. For the 

final, I need to make changes in order to bring my report together and have the audience engaged.