Reflection to Draft #1 of Research Paper

Esmeralda Santa
English 21003, Section M
Professor Matyakubova
4 November 2017
Reflection on First Draft of Research Paper
                                                                        Research Draft
         In my first research draft I used different course learning objectives in order to write a good 

first draft. First, I used different databases to find more sources that would enhance my paper. I used 

JSTOR, Google scholar, and MEDLINE. These databases helped me find sources that contained 

information on variety of topics such as HIV/AIDS economic impact on developing countries and 

current solution to the epidemic. Also to better understand what HIV/AIDS was, I went to the CCNY 

library to find a book on the topic. With the help of a librarian, I was able to find a medical book, that 

I will use in my research paper. Lastly, I also used the internet to find more sources and was able to 

find credible websites, that contained case studies and surveys. 

         When writing the first draft, I decided to change the layout of my paper. I did not like how my 

outline structure was, so I changed some paragraphs and included new evidence. For the new layout, 

I believe it makes more of an appeal to logos. My next step, will have to be to conduct an interview, 

that will be used towards making an appeal to pathos. I also need to make my paragraphs more 

appealing, so that that audience is better engaged. I feel as if some paragraphs are too long and I 

need to break them down. Overall, for my final research report I still have a lot to work on and the 

peer-review will allow me to see what I need to improve on.  


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